Revision :)

When comparing my rough draft paper to my final draft paper, obviously there's a few differences.When writing my rough draft paper I pretty much just free write and write whatever to get to the point. During peer review, my peer made me realize I did forget the little things like hello, description! So In my final paper I described the place and family members I mention so you can pretty much get a feel from where I am coming from and probably even relate to my paper. I also reread my paper and decided I can add more to it, just sentences that i thought were not independent clauses or full thoughts. I didn't really change my paper because I felt I didn't need to. The Literacy narrative is a story of your experience, filled with your thoughts. Of course my thought cannot be stated wrong, well maybe but I felt it wasn't necessary to, so I only changed a few things. I would say the peer review and the clause lesson in class pretty much influenced my revisions. I feel what makes my paper strong is the story itself and how it still affects me today as I continue to struggle with it.